The piece I would like to revise is my science cinquain called The Liver. I need to have it make more since about what I mean when I use the characteristics about them.
The Liver

When I think of it, it makes me oozy (stomach turning)

Nasty, gooey, and rubbery (loose and gooey like goop or jelly)

It moves any way it is like soap (gooey and very slippery)

The first time I heard of it I about through up (made me very sick to my stomach)